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Legend of M. DeLis, snippet 4 by *jamberry-song:iconjamberry-song:





Flash Fiction Month, July 09, 3: "Legend of M. DeLis," snippet 4


"Please, Father! Please!"

William Gregory did not heed. He had his son by a handful of scarlet hair, was dragging him up and up and up the stone staircase.

"Father, I beg you."

They came to the top of the north tower, where the walls were crumbling inward. Where rats scuttled bright-eyed in the corners and the floor was thick with old straw and pigeon droppings. William turned, grasped his son by the throat and thrust him through the window.

Alexander's body shook. He was looking down at the ground below, dizzy with the height. His small pale hands wrapped around his father's larger ones at his neck. He stared pleadingly into the older man's eyes. "Father..."

William's face was a gruesome mask. "Say the prayer."

Tears ran without summon down Alexander's cheeks. "I-I can't..."

"Say it!" He pushed the boy further out over the courtyard below, so that he was almost parallel to the ground. His knees rested precariously on the open stone sill.

"D-dearest L-Lord, thine w-will be law. Look up-up-on me, born a sinner. I, who h-have k-killed mine own m-mother---" Alexander gasped, choked. He held desperately to his father's wrists. "I wh-who have p-poisoned mine own father with g-grief... C-c-cast me to the pit and may th-thine forgiveness b-be reserved f-for one more f-fitting than I. Hear m-my prayer, oh Lord wh---"

William yanked his son back into the room, he flung him to the floor muttering curses to himself. "You will learn to say the prayer without fear. You will know it so well that, when you die, you will say it to the Lord himself without stutter or hesitation." He leveled a hard, critical glare at the boy. "Today will not be your day of reckoning. Consider yourself fortunate for it."

Alexander could only lie there, his hand holding his throbbing throat. He looked up to his father in misery.

"Now, I can no longer tolerate the sight of you." William swung on his heels and disappeared back down the stairwell. The hollow sounds of his boots faded with distance.

Alexander hung his head and wept. "Oh dearest Lord, thine w-will be law. H-hear me, look upon me, born a sinner..."


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Author's Comments

July has been declared Flash Fiction Writing Month!!
for more information, go here: [link]
Or check out their dA account, *Flash-Fic-Month

This is "The Legend of M. DeLis," snippet 4.
367 words.

I have used Flash Fiction Writing Month as a reason to write some more of these snippets for my novel project, which you can find here: [link] .
This is a first glimpse at Alexander's childhood.

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-07-11

Flash Fiction Month July 09 3 by ~jamberry-song is captivating and emotional from beginning to end. "Flash Fiction Month July 09 3" tells a lot about the characters in so few words (Suggested by =TimeFalcon and Featured by ^StJoan)

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:iconordie:
Fascinating concept.

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:icontimefalcon:
excellent job! sounds like the mother died in childbirth. D: Poor boy. :(

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:iconjamberry-song:
Yep, you got it. :nod:
His father's a mad man.

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:iconjamberry-song:
Why thank you. :)

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:icontimefalcon:
I can tell. :( Poor little boy. It makes me want to give him a hug. :hug:

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:iconiamphoenixmoth:
WTF WTF MY BABY.

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Me(E): you are a dreamcrusher, Alex. A brilliant one, but a dreamcrusher.
A: haha
E: you are, sir. I should go dig up Langston Hughes and tell him that.
A: you should
E: "What happens to a dream deferred?" "It gets stomped on by Alex."
:iconalyksirrom:
Great, but sad story,
kept me on my edge.

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:icongrandchild:
nice choice of words and a tight captivating read, i enjoyed it a lot :)

congrats on the DD!

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Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)

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:icon00alisa00:
Very nice!
it's really well written,even if it's a bit sad :)
congrats on your DD!

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